My dad doesn’t just read a vast collection of Science-Fiction novels. He also writes them. Well, one and a half of them to be exact. He’s not well known for them; you wouldn’t recognize his name. In fact, he has never even gotten one published. He sent his one finished one to Michael Crichton’s publisher. Only Michael Crichton’s publisher. But still, the novels occupy a large amount of his time and energy. And even though nothing has really come of the hours except for a novel read by a maximum of seven people, The Immortality Gene is one of the things my dad is most proud of in his life. He is living proof that you don’t need to be famous for the things you work hard in, or even really show anyone, for you to count them among the most important things you’ve accomplished.
I’m not really sure what my dad’s novel is about. I tried to read it, and don’t get me wrong, it was really good. But I was eleven, and I didn’t really understand the concept of genetics. It turns out genetics seems to be a pretty important subject in a book called The Immortality Gene. However, seeing as my dad spent ten years of precious after-work time with the glow of the Microsoft Word reflecting off his eyes, I knew there was something in those 500 pages that mattered.
After ten years of writing, he finally finished. I can’t imagine that feeling: working on something for ten years and finally typing that last word. Obviously, he did about a year or so of editing after that, but the bulk of it was done. I don’t even think he wanted to send it to anyone. My dad is that weird mix of personalities that throws socks around the room and can’t make any food other than oatmeal, but is a perfectionist when it comes to anything work-related. I don’t ever think he would’ve thought the book was good enough to send to a friend, let alone a publisher. But that’s what wives are for right? My mom made him print out all 500 pages and send it to at least one person. My dad chose Michael Crichton’s publisher. Michael Crichton is one of the most famous Science-Fiction authors in the world, if you didn’t know. The Immortality Gene was good, but not that good. The publisher decided to pass.
I think my dad didn’t really want the book to be published. Evidently, someone wouldn’t like it, and they would probably insult it. Probably on the internet. I think subconsciously my dad knew that he didn’t want ten years of his life, of his precious time, to be criticized. However, even though he never sent it out, he still talks about it all the time. I mean, all the time. God forbid you mention the name of his main character. You will be treated to a two-and-a-half hour synopsis of the plot and any potential plot twists that even crossed my dad’s mind. Obviously, my dad is proud of this book.
People don’t need to be aware of your creations for them to be good. You don’t need to be a best-seller to be proud of your book. You are your own worst critic. The number of un-published authors, un-signed singers, and un-appreciated artists is astounding. There is definitely someone out there who is a better singer than Rebecca Black with a song that doesn’t revolve around a day of the week. And yet, Rebecca Black has a record deal and is releasing new music that millions of people are listening to.
It takes a certain kind of bravery to put your work out there for the world to see. You’ve poured your heart into this book, song, or painting. Tears might have been spilled, sleepless night might have been endured, and an inspiration black hole might have been pushed through. My dad spent a whole year on one page of his book (apparently his antagonist was having an identity crisis). Some people aren’t quite ready to hand their creation over to the cynics. They want to preserve the pride and positive feelings surrounding their hard work. Just give them a little time, and a little encouragement, and eventually the next Michael Crichton will come out to play.
Once again your personal touch shines through in this essay. You provide minor details that add a personal touch and make your story so much more relatable. I do agree with others that this essay could be a little more focused. You do have to ideas in there: bravery required to put work out there and feeling proud of work that isn’t necessarily praised by others. Specifically, your conclusion did seem different than the rest of your paper.
Hey Erin, I really liked this essay a lot!! I found so many of your sentences and phrases really funny, and I was laughing while reading this. I feel like by reading your essay, I can see the clear story of you and your family at home listening to your dad rattle on about his book, and you paint that picture really well for your readers! Your voice was very clear and true. I would say though, that there seems to be an imbalance in this essay in terms of content. You focus a lot on how much your dad loves his book and is proud of it. Maybe you could show that faster, then devote more time to how meaningful that is and how meaningful being a writer is to someone? Overall, great job!!
Erin, I really liked your essay as well, but I agree with Christina that the last paragraph seems to deviate a little bit from what you are primarily arguing in the essay. I loved all of the little details you put in your essay because they really make everything seem very realistic – like when your dad throws socks across the room and only makes oatmeal. I think having those little “everyday life” details makes the whole story relatable to most readers who probably do the same thing. I think your thesis is pretty clear, although because I was expecting something a little more directly related to writing, I was a little thrown off guard by the thesis you presented in the beginning. You could experiment with making the bravery aspect the center of the paper instead of the fame part. That way you can still keep all of the components of your paper but have a main argument that is more directly related to writing. But overall, I really enjoyed reading this essay!
Erin, I really loved your essay! Your father’s story about his science-fiction novel was really inspiring, and I especially agree with your last paragraph that it takes courage to publicize your own work. At the beginning of your essay, it sounded like you were going to focus on how fame is unnecessary to feel proud of a piece of writing, but towards the end, it seemed to focus more on the bravery required to put your work out there; it might to helpful to include both concepts towards the beginning of your essay. However, I do think that your essay already flows well from one paragraph to the next, so I also think just letting it be is fine. I really enjoyed reading this essay, great job!!